When reading I can see that the thesis statement is in the last sentence in the first paragraph. The writer believes that higher education is bad. I know this because latter on in the reading I have some evidence to back up what the writer is thinking and his facts to back it up. for example in paragraph 3 he states that failing is a punishment while it should be used as a learning curve. Also another pice of evidence I found was in paragraph 4 talking about the expense of college and how the money for college has gone up 3.6 times higher in just the past 30 years. When reading I believe that the refutation of opposing argument is in paragraph 9 because he sates that "of course some people want a formal education" and that just show that their is more than just one side to all of this. Lastly the conclusion is in the last paragraph tying everything together and restating what he had said in the beginning.
In this essay I think the writer is using Logos and Pathos. For me the Logos part is shown in paragraph 3 when he is talking about the cost of college. He or she show multiple times facts about how the cost of college has gone up in the past 30 years. Now for Pathos I can see throughout the essay that he is showing his side and is putting a lot of emotion and bias into it. I can mainly see in paragraph 3. He or she is showing their side and really not staying any facts just what they might think about failing at the college level while others might think differently.
Now after reading this I would have to disagree with the writer. Even though we had a lot of good facts to back up with he or she thought, but I just believe that you as a individual need the tools to be successful in your field. For example you don't want a doctor who has never seen your type of illness to treat you. Of course you want the best doctor with the best training and thats what colleges does it gets you ready for the real world. Now I do agree that college cost is becoming a issue and is pushing a lot of people away, but I don't think college is broken. I just believe that we had a bad experience and didn't attend the right school.
ReplyDeleteI can see that your thesis is clear and debatable, this is because the statement "college is bad" is definitely something that people can take sides over and argue. The thesis is supported with evidence as to why this statement is credible. This argument is arranged in a well reasoned order the facts and explanations are put together nicely. This author seems to have connected to this topic with his or her passion to gather stats on college cost and irrelevance. The author does respect other viewpoints by discussing that not everyone should leave college and how some people like doctors definitely need to attend college. The sources used are documented with the use of quotations and information as to which paragraph to find them. The tone in this is used in a suitable manner for the fact that this is a blog post and not formal writing. This post was published in a professional manner, it is not informal however it is well written and flows well. This post does have a picture that helps to involve your imagination as well as quotes from the passage. For example the fact of college cost moving up 3.6 times what it used to be. This post also has a value that I discussed as well is the value of money. This is something that myself and a lot of people also care about. Everyone would like a higher level of education but not everyone is wanting or even willing to pay for it.
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